Feedback from our Group Pitches

 

Feedback received for Group Pitches

This is the Feedback we received as a group

General Feedback

A great piece of advice we were given for deciding on an idea was to just think about which one we would have the most fun filming; this somewhat ruled out the Meeting the Parents idea as the fun would mainly come from the final product, and whilst the Ghost Story would have been very exciting to set up and film in a dark flashing classroom - the Motorcycle Hunter sequence would ultimately be the most fun to develop and film even from the creative freedom of the set itself.

Group Pitch 1 -> Meeting the Parents Sequence

The main issue we were told this sequence would bring was its reliance on acting - the tension is mostly built from the extreme suppressed anxiety the main character expresses, so if we were unable to find an actor who could act out these kind of emotions to the extent that this idea requires, the effect we hoped to achieve would just not work and could come off as flat or awkward.

 

Group Pitch 2 - >Ghost Story Sequence

The main problem with this idea was the different cultural setting - if the dialogue is in Japanese, it sets the story in Japan, which would be hard to convey as it is difficult to build a Japanese classroom setting from the classrooms available to us, e.g. the posters in english and english plugs.

More notably, there might be an issue in finding Chinese students who can speak Japanese, and it may be problematic to pass off Chinese students as Japanese of course.

 

Group Pitch 3 -> Motorcycle Hunter Sequence

We were told that adding a post-apocalyptic setting to the current story could add a lot to this sequence, we would also have to develop a backstory for the main character e.g. she is a survivor of the apocalypse and has collected a lot of resources that the main villain would want to potentially take, we would also have to remove the element of a full blown motorcycle chase scene and instead portray it through sound effects.