Our Developed Idea

We worked together to construct this detailed breakdown based off of our feedback

Some new developments we added to our final idea involved changing the very beginning and end to make it more interesting and substantial;

The original beginning followed the girl simply scavenging for resources at a junkyard, but we decided that she should instead be attempting to hot wire an abandoned car at that junkyard, then she would check her phone for signal from inside the car rather than walking around the abandoned town as it could be difficult to find a good location for that specific shot.

The original ending showed the girl going to step back outside the shack, only to be jump scared by the killer at the door reaching out to grab her - we changed it so that, whilst the girl leans back against the door in relief, she slides down to sit against it to catch her breath before a (fake) weapon -a battle axe for now- suddenly crashes into the shot next to her as she jumps back and screams. We then see the killer as he forcefully pulls the axe back out of the ground and gets ready to swing it back around to kill her, the sequence would then end on a shot of the room from outside the door, we continue to hear her screaming as blood splatters against the floor of the doorway.

FULL BREAKDOWN;

• Girl is scavenging around Junkyard

• She comes across a car and opens the door before crawling in

• She starts trying to hot wire the car (more detail after independent research task)

• It fails to start so she sighs in defeat and sits down in the front seat

• She takes out her phone and checks for any signal

• We gradually hear a very quiet buzzing sound from the distance

• the sound grows louder and louder to eventually reveal it as the revving of a motorcycle

• She gets an intense look of pure horror on her face and sits fully paralysed for a few seconds 

• Just as the revving suddenly gets significantly closer, she gets it together and throws herself out of the car 

• She sprints as fast as she possibly can to a run-down looking shack

• She jumps inside and slams the door shut 

• She quickly crouches down with her back against the door, her hands pressed against her ears and her eyes shut tight

• The sounds of the motorcycle quickly approach the shack 

• The sounds slow in pace as they reach the doorway from the outside 

• The motorcycle starts to circle around the shack

• The girl jolts from shock and follows the sound with her head as it passes by every wall 

• The sound then suddenly drowns out and somewhat disappears

• She sits completely shivering for a few seconds and cautiously takes her hands off her ears

• She quietly lifts herself up and turns around to creak the door open

• She peeks outside and scans her surroundings before fully opening the door to reveal an empty scene

• She steps back inside and leans against the wall, sliding down to sit against it, she sighs in relief

• All of a sudden a battle axe crashes into the shot right beside her 

• She jumps back and screams

• The killer then pulls the axe back out of the ground and holds it above his shoulder, ready to swing it back around to kill her

• We then look in from outside the open door, we hear her screaming as blood splatters onto the floor of the doorway